In my writing now I want to comment Sulfia’s writing. Here the text
UTTARAN
Nowadays, The Serial TV lovers in
Indonesia have been made fallen love by uttaran. Uttaran is one of serial TV
from India which becomes popular until got a second in Indonesia after “Anak
Jalanan”. Actually, for my personal I not really know about uttaran because I rarely to watching the serial TV
like that. So I can know about uttaran from my
sister in law who really like uttaran. She said
serial uttaran is one of the serial TV that have
to watching everyone in Indonesia.
After asking my sister in law and some of my neighbors, I
can know if uttaran have a good story which
enough cleanse beholder emotional with story triangle Love Ichcha (Tina Dutta),
Veer (Nandish Sandhu) and Tapasyah (Rashami Desai). In this serial also tell
story about the meaning of friendship, it cause from serial uttaran we can saw
how sacrifice of Iccha as a good friend of Tapasyah who can do everything for
make her best friend “Tapasyah” becomes happy. Although, it’s means must
sacrificing her love.
In this serial have many messages for the audience like
meaning of friendship, familiarity and sacrifice which I think rarely we can
find in real life. But I have little worry about this phenomenon because I
think if the serial TV from another country can have good responds in our
country, but how about the original serial TV from Indonesia?..
To
Be Continue …….
After I read Fia’s writing I have some comment
about that teks.
1. Actually, your writing is good but I think the synopsis
of the topic is still lacking.
2. The sentence or the order word of your writing is quite
easy for me to understand, I like it.
3. In
the last paragraph, But I have little worry about this
phenomenon because I think if the serial TV from another country can have
good responds in our country, but how about the original serial TV from Indonesia?
ð Maybe
you can Add a coma
4. Should be in writing in a name " Uttaran " should begin a capital letter.
5. The last one I would like to ask when the continuation of
this writing is ??
I think it's all I can comment, because I also have a lot
of mistakes in my writing. so you should also visit my blog to leave a comment.
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